What do you think of my poem?

The rhymes are ok and I like the poem in general however, you have to do something about that rhythm. Instead of everyday, say perhaps "each day" so you start with "each" instead of "everyday". In other words, go for iambic instead of trochaic. Keep near to a beat please, I've advised you this many times but you never listen, even without counting I was jarred in the head by this. If you don't follow form and yet aren't freeverse (having rhymes), then this is a confused piece - doesn't know where it stands. Please rewrite and repost this meaningful piece and email me if you have questions.